From One to the Next
Like a murmuring moon,
my lunation turns and repeats,
always unfinished.
As indistinct as air–
unbroken darkness veiled
in expanding light.
Before and after become lost–
the shifting rhymes
remain untamed.
The edge waxes and wanes.
The colors blend and unrainbow–
silent, dazzled, unforeseen.
A quadrille for dVerse (murmur), which also includes this week’s words from the Secret Keeper. It was also inspired by Frank Tassone’s hazy moon challenge, although I’m not sure these verses meet any real criteria for haiku.
29 responses to “From One to the Next”
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- November 8, 2019 -
so drawn into it!
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Thanks Jodi. The moon, again.
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Ohhhh. I LOVE that “murmuring moon.” YES.
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Thanks. Murmur is such a great word.
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Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
#Haiku Happenings #6: Method two Madness’ latest haiku sequence #quadrille for #dverseppets and my current #haikai challenge!
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Thanks Frank!
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My pleasure! 😇
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unroainbow… what a wonderful swirl of a word
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unrainbow of course
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Thanks Bjorn!
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Love the words and art
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Thanks Lynn.
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Hypnotizing words and image.
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Thanks Sharon. The passing of time can definitely hypnotize. I would often like to be paying more attention.
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I like the idea of a lunation turning like a murmur.
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Thanks Frank. I love the word lunation, so I was glad to get a chance to use it!
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Colors blend and “unrainbow”–I love that. It’s like time unbending somehow.
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Thanks Merril. Time and space…I can’t quite figure them out.
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I can’t either, but I love thinking about them. 🙂
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Beautiful!
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Thanks Betty!
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I love the tone, magic and mystery in this. The artwork and poem complement each other beautifully. Wonderful post. 🙂
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Thanks!
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Beautiful Kerfe! 😃 You always create such amazing works of art – in writing and art! 👍🎨
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Thanks Jill!
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I prefer this version. I agree with you that the second version has an awkwardness about it, voyeuristic almost. There’s a reason you wrote it like this originally, because you didn’t want to analyse the intimacy of the thoughts behind it, even at one stage removed in third person. One of the things I find so infuriating about so much contemporary poetry—it’s all me me me, the deep thoughts that finally don’t really interest anyone but the writer.
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Thanks Jane. I’m not a fan of confessional poetry either. Wallowing in (often trivial) personal issues doesn’t appeal to me.
This version definitely feels more natural in its voice, although I like some of the imagery in the second one.
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The imagery is what makes it. It’s the perspective of this version I prefer though.
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