The Ways of Self-Salvation 2

ways 2s

Demanding patience, spirit grows deep–
nourished and carried near to the heart.
Waiting, waiting, my soul for to keep–
shadows breathing and falling apart.

Nourished and carried near to the heart–
the third eye opens, window and mirror.
Shadows breathing and falling apart–
beginning is singing, ending is near.

The third eye opens, window and mirror–
the ripeness growing, large and complete.
Beginning is singing, ending is near–
emptying follows, head and then feet

The ripeness growing, large and complete–
rocking inside a musical voice.
Emptying follows, head and then feet–
atoms laughing in naked warm noise.

Rocking inside a musical voice–
no thoughts to speak, no dreams to word.
Atoms laughing in naked warm noise–
diving like oceans, skying like birds.

No thoughts to speak, no dreams to word–
demanding patience, spirit grows deep.
Diving like oceans, skying like birds–
waiting, waiting, my soul for to keep.

I don’t normally post twice in the same day, but Jane Dougherty’s pantoum, “It was not a night like this”, reminded me a lot of this one I wrote last year, which was based on a poem I wrote a very long time ago.

ways close up 2s

I’m also linking it to the dVerse narrative prompt, although I too am not sure it is exactly what Bjorn is looking for.

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22 responses to “The Ways of Self-Salvation 2”

  1. merrildsmith says :

    It’s very dreamy, surreal. Did you ever see the Lathe of Heaven that was on PBS years and years ago? For some reason, this made me think of that. 🙂

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  2. Jane Dougherty says :

    The repetition of ‘feet’ seems very daring to me, it’s such an unpoetic body part, and it’s such a good line! I love the feel of the plunge and soar in this, and the illustration is beautiful, like an insubstantial being diving into or rising from the ocean.

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  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says :

    I like it… and actually many stories are very circular as I think yours are… in a way like a dream, leaving returning… like falling asleep then awakening.

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  4. sarahsouthwest says :

    Qh, I like a phantom, but they are tricky to pull off. This flows really naturally, and the repetition does give it a dreamy quality.

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  5. sheldonk2014 says :

    What a piece of art

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  6. rivrvlogr says :

    You do have a way with a pantoum! Lovely.

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  7. purplepeninportland says :

    Wonderful story told in pantoum form. Well done.

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  8. Gospel Isosceles says :

    A romantic view of the spiritual life, and I like the emphasis on “waiting, waiting…” Certainly there is a music to that action/non-action.

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    • memadtwo says :

      Thank you. It’s interesting for me to see the different interpretations of my words. I’m glad I didn’t talk about how the poem originated. Waiting is definitely a big piece of it, and certainly applies to anything spiritual. Music as well.

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  9. Frank Hubeny says :

    Nice phrase: “my soul for to keep.”

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  10. Olga says :

    The first image feels like the human soul ascending with heavenly wings. 🙂

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