Cloud Forest (Draw a Bird Day)

el oro 2s

Outside the visible, the veil persists, a misted crown,
a canopy to shelter woodlands from both up and down–
the spirits dance their circles through the portals of the clouds,
beyond enclosure following the songs of the unknown.

With wings of color bearing light and magic on the air,
the alchemy of green and gold renews and then repairs
this ancient symbiosis moored to currents at its core
awakening new seeds, building a bridge from here to there.

The El Oro Parakeet is an endangered bird living in the Andes cloud forest of Southwestern Ecuador.  Cloud forests are also endangered throughout the world.  You can read about them here.

el oro head s

This is my first attempt at a rubaiyat poem, the featured form at dVerse for February.  I could not make 13 syllables work, so I ended up with 14.  I also fudged the rhymes a bit.  I don’t usually write long lines, and that was what I found to be the biggest challenge for me.


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55 responses to “Cloud Forest (Draw a Bird Day)”

  1. thelonelyauthorblog says :

    Beautiful post. Drawing and words.

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  2. D. Wallace Peach says :

    What a pretty bird. I love the close-up and the way the painting changes. Beautiful words. Your poetry always soars. 🙂

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  3. robertawrites235681907 says :

    A lovely poem and your poem is fabulous.

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  4. Hélène - Willow Poetry says :

    Beautiful painting, colours are sparkling. Your poem is phenomenal, well written.

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  5. Dorinda Duclos says :

    Beautiful artwork, beautiful poem!

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  6. rivrvlogr says :

    I love the detail you provide in just a few strokes – both art and words.


  7. Robert D says :

    First, intriguing poem. Second, I didn’t know about that particular parakeet. You taught me something today. Kudos!

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  8. kiddlescarol says :

    Pretty bird, who probably wants a cracker 🙂

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  9. Claudia McGill says :

    I love both picture and words. Exotic beauty made universal.

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  10. petrujviljoen says :

    I love your poem Kerfe. I’ve never heard of the cloud forests and will look them up. Thanks for the link.

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  11. Frank Hubeny says :

    I have yet to attempt a 13 syllable rubaiyat sticking to 8 or 10 syllables. I like the sound of yours and I hope to give this longer line a try before the month is over. Your phrase: “currents at its core” stands out for me both in its sound and sense.

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  12. Sharon Mann says :

    I was instantly pulled in by the color of the El Oro Parakeet, emphasizing my favorite line in your poem… “With wings of color bearing light and magic on the air”

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  13. merrildsmith says :

    Lovely poem and bird portrait. I haven’t written a rubaiyat yet for the challenge. I tried to write one with 13 syllables, but it wasn’t working. . .

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  14. Dave Whatt says :

    Ho ho!… I do like him, or her?….

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  15. msjadeli says :

    These are lovely in form and content. I especially like the first 2 lines of the 2nd one. Mystical and glorious.

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  16. Janice says :

    A beautiful imagining of a cloud forest (also interesting to learn about this kind of phenomena…hadn’t heard of it before)

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  17. Jill Kuhn says :

    Your parrot is gorgeous!! Wow! 💚

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  18. Mish says :

    I especially like the imagery here…”the spirits dance their circles through the portals of the clouds”. I hope these beautiful birds can survive extinction.

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  19. Jane Dougherty says :

    I love that perky parrot. I didn’t know about the 13 syllable rule. I thought it was iambic pentametre.

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  20. jillys2016 says :

    It really does take a bit of practice to get into 14-syllabic lines and this one is my favorite:” the spirits dance their circles through the portals of the clouds” It dances wonderfully, especially out loud!
    I find that the more I read the longer lines by some of the great poets, the more I feel the rhythm of it. Nice job and love the art!

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  21. Gina says :

    keeping your rubaiyat to 2 stanzas worked well even of you thought it was too long per line. the imagery was beautifully expressed.

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  22. Rosemary Nissen-Wade says :

    I think you handled your long lines well, and that the extra syllable doesn’t matter as there are not hard-and-fast rules on that, so much as things that have been done.

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  23. robtkistner says :

    Well written rubaiyat Kerfe, and touched such an important note, given the endangered status of the beautiful bird. I did mot know that cloud forests were disappearing. Sadly, not surprising given the careless way we handle our planet. Also, your bird is besutifully executed. You have wonderful talent!

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  24. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says :

    I love what you did both in art and words… the endangered species are worth our full attention.

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  25. The Naturarian says :

    Lovely painting!

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