Otherworld
Our years collected and worn–
blurred images of moving light,
multiplied as remnants of form
in a place where days have no weight
Blurred images of moving light,
wandering rooted yet unearthed–
in a place where days have no weight
our location is always inferred
Wandering rooted yet unearthed,
entwined in threads of air–
our location is always inferred
like outlines of skeletal prayer
Entwined in threads of air,
our voices echo in disarray–
like outlines of skeletal prayer,
a presence hovering halfway
Our voices echo in disarray–
unbodied, but too tangled to deny–
a presence hovering halfway,
an absence dancing in the sky
Unbodied, but too tangled to deny–
multiplied as remnants of form–
our absence dancing in the sky,
our years collected and worn
Another pantoum, for Sue Vincent’s photo prompt, above. This started out as a very different poem, but I think the Oracle is still hanging around.
dVerse is featuring the Pantoum this month. In case you haven’t noticed, it’s a form I like a lot.
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- March 14, 2019 -
Fabulous. The pantoum is not an easy one to pull off well. Every week you leave me amazed, Kerfe. But this one is just something else!
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Thanks Sue. The feeling is mutual!
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🙂
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a look at life from all angles, knowing ultimately it comes full circle, but what we do with the threads and that circle carries weight to the final destination. i really love how you used the form here, to ponder over the mysteries of life. you do the form so well, the connection to something more mystical than we give credit to echoes through the pantoum.
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Thanks Gina. I think the pantoum works well for contemplation, how we turn things over in our minds. And Sue’s photos are always full of mystery.
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Your writing (and art) talent WOW’s me–I’m amazed anew every time. Blessings to you today 🙂
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Thank you Ennie! The world is full of blessings, we just need to look.
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You’re welcome…and yes, indeed.
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Fantastic poem and the oracle suits every stanza in your poem, Marta. Ephemeral and all comes to a full circle.
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It does. Thanks Marta.
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Welcome dear.
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I found myself concentrating less on the form and more on the words. You manage to create different images when the lines are repeated, so the repetition passes unnoticed. Those images of unearthed but rooted, tangled in the air, are so evocative of weightlessness, lack of attachment, yet feeling bound to something intangible.
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Thanks Jane. This one went through many versions, but I’m glad it came together so well in the end. And that’s the feeling I wanted, that’s what the photo said to me.
I had to discard some lines I really liked though…but they may find a home eventually.
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There are good lines and there’s a poem. The lines will keep. I really liked the result.
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That’s exactly right.
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🙂
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wonderful!
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Thanks Jodi!
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Expertly written and your form is flawless..
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Thanks Violet. It took many versions to get to this one.
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It’s a form you do very well.
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Thanks. Practice…
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Beautiful artwork and pantoum, Kerfe. I like the form a lot too.
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Thanks Diana…I’m sure there will be at least one more this month!
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A fine dose of metaphysics here. You had me at /like outlines of skeletal prayer/. Your subtle rhyme schemes work well. I got sort of lost with the fifth stanza, but then probably the Pantoum has multiple forms.
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“wandering rooted yet unearthed–” I love this line. You have used your first line as your last line as intended by my understanding of the form, where the meaning has shifted. Such a beautiful pantoum.
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I love this… the form lends itself to a dreaminess that work so well.
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Thanks Bjorn. Pantoums definitely work well for dreams.
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Such mystic and energy from your poem and photo. The opening lines really captured my attention and set the tone.
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Thanks Grace.
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I like the mystery contained herein Kerfe, it’s a captivating read!
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Thanks Rob. Pretty much everything contains mystery I think.
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