Hallow

hallow s

summon the bones
uncoiled dream
chasm, koan
raw energy

uncoiled dream
glimpses of signs
raw energy
vanishing lines

glimpses of signs
particles in sync
vanishing lines
held on the brink

particles in sync
images transpire
held on the brink
omens, desire

images transpire
time distills
omens, desire
nowhere reveals

time distills
chasm, koan
nowhere reveals
summon the bones

One more pantoum for the dVerse March poetic form, inspired by Sue Vincent’s photo prompt above.

hallow close up 2s

Sabio Lantz posted a pantoum that I found very appealing in its brief rhythmic images. He said in his post that he had discovered that the original Maylay pantoums had very short lines, so I thought I would try one in that spirit.  I’ve always thought the pantoum form worked well for chants, and the shorter lines magnify this feeling.

 

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41 responses to “Hallow”

  1. merrildsmith says :

    This is like a mystical chant!

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  2. Priscilla Bettis says :

    A cool response to Sue’s prompt.

    Your art has captured the mood and colors of Sue’s image!

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  3. robertawrites235681907 says :

    This is fabulous, Kerfe.

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  4. Sue Vincent says :

    Beautifl, Kerfe. The painting looks very like the eye of a rock we know, high on one of the sacred hills…

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  5. Claudia McGill says :

    I think your painting looks like a geode. The beauty hidden inside until the rock is opened.

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  6. rivrvlogr says :

    Yes, a chant. Even a bit of an evocation, with your art as a parting of clouds prior to a revelation.

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  7. Gina says :

    your artwork is stunning, like a crack in the mountains I just visited. the short lines of the pantoum reads like a chant, it has the rhythm of a prayer gong

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  8. Jodi says :

    oh this art! I immediately see the side view of an eye – and I am so drawn to it!

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  9. Sharon Mann says :

    Magical mystical tour!

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  10. Ennle Madresan says :

    WOW wow wow wow wow, You’ve blown me away again!

    Liked by 1 person

  11. thelonelyauthorblog says :

    A great submission for the response.

    Liked by 1 person

  12. Jane Dougherty says :

    You and Sabio are perfectly right. This does have a chant-like quality to it, and goes so well the oddly mystic feel to the image. I like this pared-down pantoum very much.

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  13. robtkistner says :

    This had an eternal, mystic, chant-like impact – almost a spell perhaps. I enjoyed reading it. I read it aloud, that’s when I felt I was casting a spell… Nice Kerfe!

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  14. Charlie O'Shields says :

    This is so beautiful! I love the way your paintings and words mix… it’s a wonderful experience! 😍

    Liked by 1 person

  15. Michele Jones says :

    Very nice. You can feel the draw.

    Liked by 1 person

  16. Victoria C. Slotto says :

    The brevity works well in this mystical poem. Gorgeous painting, too.

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