Alterations

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I am following a voiceless sound,
a heaven-circling gravity
larger than the known,
a floating moon-blown body
invisibly dense

I am weighed down
by its absence

My phantom limbs grasp
at the tide-looped nothing
that pulls me into its wake,
that surrounds me
with unsheltering, refusing
my exhausted tear-culled pleas

I cannot move and yet
the journey continues

I cannot sing and yet
my mind is full
of dust-tongued chords

I shed my skin,
leave my bones behind

I am going
absolutely nowhere

fast and endlessly
eclipsed by a juncture
of dark-vowelled circumstances

without limits

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I’m not sure this follows the NaPoWriMo prompt to assume an unusual point of view, but it does contain hyphenated words from Dylan Thomas, which is the dVerse Poetics prompt from Laura Bloomsbury.

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36 responses to “Alterations”

  1. Laura Bloomsbury says :

    You have created the mood perspective for the NaPoWriMO prompt with your “a voiceless sound,
    a heaven-circling gravity”

    and used Dylan Thomas’ word compounds beautifully
    “my mind is full
    of dust-tongued chords”

    So glad you joined in with the DT prompt as well

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  2. Shuku Li says :

    ❤ Oh my goodness, this is beautiful Kerfe, I love it. So many memorable vivid phrases but this one stands out!

    dark-vowelled circumstances
    without limits

    As a singer, the dark vowels REALLY make sense!

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  3. robertawrites235681907 says :

    This is excellent, very intense.

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  4. kim881 says :

    This poem is darkly dreamlike and evokes images of floating in space, Kerfe. Tthere is an exquisite eeriness in the lines:

    ‘My phantom limbs grasp
    at the tide-looped nothing
    that pulls me into its wake’

    and

    ‘I shed my skin,
    leave my bones behind

    eclipsed by a juncture
    of dark-vowelled circumstances

    without limits’.

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  5. Olga says :

    It looks like the circle is shedding its skin, making way for the new. Deep thoughts in your poetry, Kerfe.

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  6. merrildsmith says :

    Dreamy, but intense –like a dream from which you can’t awaken.
    “I am going
    absolutely nowhere

    fast and endlessly
    eclipsed by a juncture
    of dark-vowelled circumstances

    without limits”

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  7. rivrvlogr says :

    Wow! Intense, ans as Merril hints, a dream that won’t wake.

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  8. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says :

    There is a sense of a nightmare in this… I fear it’s one that circle back to its beginning.

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  9. Jane Dougherty says :

    ‘I shed my skin
    leave my bones behind’

    Love that. What’s left? Nothing? The essence? A shiver?

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  10. Claudia McGill says :

    “I cannot sing and yet
    my mind is full
    of dust-tongued chords” This line right here really struck me. The whole thing, so eloquent. Wow.

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  11. Jodi says :

    WOWWW!!! So drawn into this work of art – then the words!!

    Liked by 1 person

  12. robtkistner says :

    Very mysterious Kerfe, and the mystery pulls one through the read. Nicely done!

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  13. Charlie O'Shields says :

    This is so wonderfully full of energy and contemplation (both the words and the visual). I love that the journey ends “without limits”… reverses all the doubt before it. 😍

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  14. Ennle Madresan says :

    I don’t know how you do it–phenomenal writing just pours out of you, and on top of the beautiful art.

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  15. msjadeli says :

    There’s a claustrophobic feel to this, especially with the gravity and without limits. You conjure the feeling of futility also as you try to articulate what it is.

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  16. areadingwriter says :

    The intensity stirs the soul!!! love these lines:
    I cannot sing and yet
    my mind is full
    of dust-tongued chords

    Liked by 1 person

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