reveiled s

We are tracing broken shadowed dreams,
lines that curve and end up on the edge–
these places that come back
and close the door

Lines that curve and end up on edges
that cannot be reached
through any door–
both sides spiraling

They cannot be breached–
they remain, still, abandoned
by both sides, spiraling,
bathed in an untranslatable light

They remain still, abandoned–
we freeze them into frames
bathed in an untranslatable light–
we want to keep them safe, unchanged

We freeze them into frames
that hold our lives like clenched fists–
we want to keep ourselves safe, unchanged,
imprisoned in a maze of rooms

We hold our lives in clenched fists
that deny the landscape of after–
imprisoned in a maze of rooms
from the country of before

Lost in the landscape of after,
these places come back
from the country of before–
we are tracing broken shadowed dreams


A pantoum for Sue Vincent’s photo prompt, above.

reveiled close up s


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24 responses to “Reveiled”

  1. Sue Vincent says :

    I love the artwork for this one, Kerfe, but the pantoum is perfectly crafted and beautiful. I wonder what would happen though if we let ourselves escae the maze…?

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  2. robertawrites235681907 says :

    This is a lovely poem, Kerfe, and your art is very eye catching.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. boundlessblessingsblog says :

    We sure are tracing broken shadowed dreams and our lines are all curved and crooked. An awesome poem, Marta and I loved the painted pictures too. Great poem.

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  4. Jane Dougherty says :

    I love the repeated images in this. Reminds me of the san san form—I’ve completely forgotten how to write a pantoum—those lines, edges, curved shadows, such a good analogy for our repeated mistakes, and our obsession with going back, or trying to pull something out of the past.

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    • memadtwo says :

      Thanks Jane. We do seem to have a hard time letting go.
      I don’t think I’ve ever tried a san san, I’ll have to put it in my pile of forms to try.


  5. Manja Mexi Movie says :

    Beautiful art and words combined.

    Liked by 1 person

  6. merrildsmith says :

    This pantoum is so compelling–we’re drawn along on this spirals–compelled–but also lost. Your watercolor looks like a lost world.

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  7. Sharon Mann says :

    Time to step out of the maze…your art is mesmerizing!

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  8. Evelyn says :

    Very lovely art work – wonderful colours and textures…

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  9. Claudia McGill says :

    Sometimes you just want to start breaking something. This beautiful poem expresses my feeling so much more delicately and elegantly and yet that underlying strength is there. How you do this, I don’t know. And the art adds a whole other layer. Just beautifully said, both words and visual.

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  10. memadtwo says :

    Thanks Claudia. I’m so glad you connect with it…that’s what we want from our work.


  11. rickyracer42 says :


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