The Visitor (Thursday Doors Writing Challenge)

photo by Dan Antion

Is that a knock at the door?
The bell has never worked–
now the door is pounding
as is my heart.

No one comes
to this door anymore.
“Who is it?”

A voice emerges in sounds
that form no words
I can understand.
Have I forgotten any language
but the one inside my head?

Fear keeps the door closed.
“Who do you want?”
Silence, then more sounds.
Angry.

Will they try to kick the door
open, like that crazy lost soul
years ago who thought
I had stolen his home? 
(Where is he now?
I wonder with sudden alarm)—

But whoever or whatever
this is does not reply
with force, or any other thing.

After a while I sense only
the empty street.  Waiting.
For what, who?  I wait, too–
with the door, the street,
the intractable world.

Dan’s door photo reminded me of what the world felt like during the early months of Covid. I actually did experience an incident similar to this. I was newly moved into an apartment (in February 2020–that’s the door in the second photo) and knew no one in the building at all. Perhaps they had the wrong apartment, or were looking for the former resident. In any case, they never came back.

The whole city was eerily quiet for a long time.

The collages are from a series I did in the 1980s. Many of them contained doors.

The Thursday Doors Writing Challenge is open for the entire month of May, hosted by Dan Antion. Anyone can join in–you can see all the doors available to inspire you here.

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44 responses to “The Visitor (Thursday Doors Writing Challenge)”

  1. Teresa 何 Robeson's avatar
    Teresa 何 Robeson says :

    This is haunting and makes for a wonderful flash fiction piece in addition to a poem.

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  2. merrildsmith's avatar
    merrildsmith says :

    I agree with Teresa. You don’t often write narratives, and this one is kind of a thriller. Who was knocking? What did they want? It could even be supernatural.

    I agree those months were eerie. We didn’t go into the city then, but even here, it was very quiet. I wouldn’t see anyone when I went out walking, and if I did, we avoided each other.

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  3. D. Avery @shiftnshake's avatar
    D. Avery @shiftnshake says :

    What a hard time to have moved into a new place. It was an eerily quiet time then, and your poem has an eerie quality as well, of uncertainty, fear, waiting.

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      memadtwo says :

      It was not good timing. But my life was already kind of in turmoil at that time, which was why I moved. And everything was strange then. I’m not sure we’ve yet recovered from it.

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  4. Ashley's avatar
    Ashley says :

    A tantalising tale! Ooooh! When my wife and I married, such a long time ago, we first lived in London, in flat-land and had a similar experience. Newly weds in a big city, exciting and scary!

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  5. Dan Antion's avatar
    Dan Antion says :

    I feel the tension and unease in that poem, Kerfe. I’ve had a similar experience, and this brings back those thoughts. Well done!

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  6. Suzette Benjamin's avatar
    Suzette Benjamin says :

    This is a totally relatable and well done story and share Kerfe. The sense of foreboding in your story and the images are perfectly aligned. Love your collages. Well done!

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  7. Colleen Chesebro's avatar
    Colleen Chesebro says :

    The door artwork is stunning, Kerfe. I like the how paper texture mimics real life. Great work!

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  8. robbiesinspiration's avatar
    robbiesinspiration says :

    Hi Kerfe, this poem really does capture the eeriness and anxiety of this situation. Lovely art too.

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  9. outsideauthority's avatar
    outsideauthority says :

    I love the collages

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  10. Liz Gauffreau's avatar
    Liz Gauffreau says :

    This is a terrifying poem. It made my breath catch in my throat. My husband and I had a similar situation when we lived in the city. It was pretty evident that whoever was pounding on the door was looking for a drug dealer–and that wasn’t us.

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  11. Rajani Radhakrishnan's avatar
    Rajani Radhakrishnan says :

    (Where is he now?
    I wonder with sudden alarm)— oh the parentheses add a whole new dimension to the poem…wonderfully written…and I love those collages.

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  12. SelmaMartin's avatar
    SelmaMartin says :

    I love the artwork you presented K. The poem gives goosebumps as this could really happen to anyone. And that you chose to narrate the tale alongside that photo of Dan’s and that white door behind which you later tell me held you safe-in-place at the time of Covid gives the scary tale resonance and familiarity. What a scary time we survived. For now. Though I too fear we haven’t seen the last of it. Thanks. A great post.

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  13. Cindy Georgakas's avatar
    Cindy Georgakas says :

    Oh my that definitely would evoke fear and sounds like Covid times for sure, K. Love the doors and story reminiscent of times for me. 🩷

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  14. Oddment's avatar
    Oddment says :

    How quickly you evoked tension. I could feel that electricity of sudden threat. “The intractable world” indeed — one never knows who will roar out of it and pound on the door. How very descriptive of the time of COVID, and maybe now too. As it happens, I too have been working with this photo, and so I was all the more intrigued by your take on it. I kind of feel I’ve been inside. Writing does weird things to us.

    Your artwork always gives another dimension. Very subtle, and I like it a lot.

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  15. boundlessblessingsblog's avatar
    boundlessblessingsblog says :

    Lovely and intriguing post Kerfe. Your poem too is eerie.

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  16. boundlessblessingsblog's avatar
    boundlessblessingsblog says :

    You are always welcome Kerfe. Have a wonderful week ahead 💖💖

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